The Goddess

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Among the cold icy winds she lay
A young lass, she lay on the rocks
Fused with the wet black rocks
Wet, cold and naked she sat there

Kissed by the wave, lying on rocks
Making love to the cold wind around
She lay there on the rocks naked
White and perfect like the moon

Intoxicating Like a glass of wine
Sparkling like pearls from the seas
Her eyes soft and shy, covered down
glistening as waves play with her

Water drops ardoning her naked body
Her tender breasts laced with them
Like fresh dew drops on a rose petal
Waiting for sun to come and bloom

Water drops slowly flow across her
Like a river cutting a grassland
Marking lines across her stomach
Glistening like moon lit rivers

Her tender thighs raw with the cold
Blushed and tendered on the rocks
Carved of the most beautiful flesh
Like a goddess on Earth she lay

Her pink feet, like a lotus petal
Lays exposed, raw and beautiful
Beautiful painted toe nails, washed
In the waves, leaving pink marks

She lay there naked, cold and wet
On the black rocks by the sea
Waves playing with her gentle flesh
Raw and tendered, she lay there

Cold wind cut her flesh, red & pink
Slowly she stood for all to see
Cold wet and raw, she stood there
Like the goddess we all wish to see

My feedback

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/8wgjlz/i_always_smoke_in_the_morning/e1wxki1?utm_source=reddit-android

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/8whn8j/asymptotic_analysis/e1wy16x?utm_source=reddit-android

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Posted Jul 6, 2018, 9:08 PM UTC · edited

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