[2383] CH1 of The Stolen Flame, Revised & Longer

I posted this the other day; I've revised it and added more scenes.

My chapter:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aKCDBX6mRyFMQlDQZL1eLHOxcVG3VbUk_u_6z242MEg/edit?usp=sharing

I've critiqued:

[1038] https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/8zztl5/1038_the_way_wires_tangle_themselves/e2mr3vw/?context=3

[1347] https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/900ghf/1347_on_the_brink_of_being_king/

[1855] https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/8zmwvi/1855_materials/