Self pity is a theif.

Fun poem. The punctuation was pretty aggressive with the ?!? I would maybe replace a few of them with good old periods.

Before I comment on this I should say I'm in no position to judge someone else's creativity. I will give you my true opinion only because I am forced to criticize if I want criticism in return...and fluff comments are frowned upon.

I feel like this could be a relationship or a drug addiction! I can feel the emotion, in my humble opinion...good poetry comes from the soul and I felt yours here.

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