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Weary - An Original Work to Share

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(I've seen a few poems here that have really moved me and impacted me, and I wanted to share a poem that I've already asked feedback for, in hopes that maybe someone could be impacted by it like I've been by others. If you want, leave a comment below and let me know what you think. I hope someone can relate to this.)

Walking out around the woods,

Watching sunsets, all untrue.

I know you'd be here if you could.

I know you think that you should,

But I don't think I'm good for you.

/

It's not that I don't love you,

God, how much I do.

I can't even go for a day without you,

So I don't know if I'll pull through.

But I know I'm not good or true,

And I know I'll be bad for you.

/

Be careful, I'm fragile.

Leave me, I'm worthless.

I've had my heart broken before.

Be careful, I'm tired,

Leave me, I'm toxic

I'm not the man you I wish I was.

/

I think of all the nights we'd share,

Staying up, just lying there.

My body resting next to yours,

Listening to your gentle breaths,

Dreaming of us on distant shores.

/

Listen, you'll hear them

The voices that whisper

And tell me I'll not be enough.

Help me, I'm haunted

By the fear of my failures.

And I'm scared I'll keep messing up.

/

Be careful, I'm broken.

Heart twisted open.

And I don't know if I can love you,

The way that I should.

(Feedback: https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/94uoah/comment/e3ogc62 https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/94sro7/comment/e3og005 )

Posted Aug 6, 2018, 2:16 AM UTC · edited

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