[1872] Venezuelan Lions

Previous critique: 2347

Mmmmmm, I'm not really sure how to describe this piece. I guess it's about this black lion that turns white and then sorta goes on a rampage or something.

You know what, I don't even really know what it's about.

I wrote it more as an exercise in trying to evoke atmosphere through imagery. The style is a bit dense with some pretty long passages, so there also that, though I can also 100% promise some very (very) short sentences too.

I mean, all critique is good critique, but what I would be really looking for would be comments about pacing and overall narrative structure. But hey, I ain't all that picky. Lemme know what you think.

Cheers!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1W4D31tm5_Upjk-wapjMJUzjvT1hRcz4GWqvPYUTDdw4/edit?usp=sharing