absolutely, im too verbose for my own good sometimes. thank you. i will take that into consideration!

Solid, though I think the narrative is a little overwhelmed by the imagery, if that makes any sense?

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I do like how the end references the third line very clearly, though the big difference in formatting threw me off for a second. I am pretty tired though, so maybe just short of processing power right now :)

    hot red knife,
    cuts me with this brazen look 
    of a thousand times no and a million times yes.
    incandescent energy diffuses into the air
    irradiating the glass filled with amber and a capstone of sud.
    i lay in sloth 
    as granules of perspiration roll down my cheek
    breathing life to the dirt that collects on my feet.
    i have entrusted my fingers with the duty of heating the knife
    till the smoke absorbs the air from me.
    
    till the water evaporates,
    and there is no more use for the knife.
    will i ever say no
    for the thousand and oneth time
    i will say yes,
    for the second last time.

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/9d0j8i/ashes_to_ashes/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/9d06qy/a_series_of_poem_titles/

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