[ 894] Israeli Underdog

Hello, here with another story. Been a little too lazy in the past few weeks and haven't edited any of my old stories so really wanted to get something out there. And I was just reading Joseph Heller's God Knows so I kinda wanted to write a short biblical story. As always, if you could point out what I did well and what I did poorly, I would appreciate it.

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STORY: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uvc2b1BHdm5SYqv7ltSbR2uory-6zpJ0cPc7-5KkeFs/edit

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CRITIQUE: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/9jxy66/2628_kissing_bug/