Loud and dirty (feedback request)

Loud and dirty

The wind is fall. Sweet and earthy.

like over ripe apples

I smell streams.

Crackling leaves.

Listen to the dirt between my toes.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/9qti5o/frigid/?st=JNMEOBBK&sh=4c41c92b

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/9qsl78/a_very_short_poem/?st=JNMET0C5&sh=49c4a744