Everything will be in vain

Feedback Received!

How am I supposed to know?

That an albatross can go

Fly high trough the blue skies,

Yet it can't escape its own demise.

****.

How am I supposed to feel?

When I have to go through this ordeal,

Like the men of yesterday

Knowing that I will be away someday.

****.

How am I supposed to continue?

When I have no peddles in my canoe

Must I go with the current?

Or is my drowning death imminent?

****.

How am I supposed to leave?

Must I yield and disbelieve

In my own soul, to deceive

All the things that I've achieved?

****.

Am I supposed to fuel this body

With lies to carry on?

Am I supposed to keep steady

And escape later on?

Am I supposed to sacrifice?

Endure the pain?

Or to simply live and turn a blind eye

That everything will

be in vain.

****.

This is my first draft, I'll continue to improve it. So your suggestions, feedback and critique are very welcome!

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/9s1pq6/Squares/e8lto12/?utm_source=reddit-android

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/9s3s31/Bad_poem_about_pressure/e8ltvfi/?utm_source=reddit-android

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