What is the term for writing in such a way that all the action and details are monotonously funneled through your character?

At one point I read several articles on the topic and how it's an easy trap but makes your writing repetitive and clunky. Now I can't bring the term to mind at all. I thought it was "framing", but I now I don't think so.

(Forgive my clumsy, over-simplified demonstration)

For example:

She noticed that her husband's eyes were red and she smelled alcohol on his breath. She realized he was drunk for the second night this week.

As opposed to:

Her husband's eyes were red, and his breath smelled of alcohol. It was the second night he had been drunk this week.

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Posted Dec 6, 2018, 1:07 AM UTC

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