drunk essay on martyrdom

Honestly, it seems a bit jumbled to me but I really like it?? I feel like it has more of an angry song type of vibe, over a poem - though I may be reading it that way due to the caps. It's really hard to pinpoint what I like specifically about it besides the violence. Maybe the idea that you can kill someone's idea of you by killing yourself and setting yourself free? I dunno.

I think it's cool. Maybe some editing to make it flow better? I think it could end with the verse that says 'I am a God'

This definitely shouted at me. Like that you're yelling, either at the world, or someone specifically. I like it in that regard. I feel it gets a bit jumbled though, after the 'I AM A GOD' part. I DO wish I knew more about the imagery from this section:

HOPE IT DOESN’T HURT WHEN THEY

PLUCK THE ARROWS FROM MY RIBCAGE AND

LAY ME OUT AGAINST THE STARS

Though, I believe that's my own failing. Also, a bit more punctuation...or some sort of break between lines would help make it more coherent, rather than just stiff. I like the capitalization. So, don't throw that away with the edit.