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Yo-He-Yoshi•

I think it’s great except for the ending. Too abrupt. I wanted more. So maybe add another verse or something, or just an outro. There could maybe be some more depth in the song. Some more contrast between spacey stuff and dryer stuff. Overall very good tho! Cheers!

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bbddbdbOP•

I agree. I ran ran out of ideas so I just sort of stopped where I was and pretended like it was supposed to end there.

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Yo-He-Yoshi•

Hahaha, yea maybe you wanna change that. I think it can go a variety of places from where it ends.

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johndepths•

I agree that the ending isn’t as strong as the rest of the song, but let me offer some paradoxical advice:

Cut the track so it ends @ 01:30s

You’ll have 90 seconds of a focused synth wave assault and have less work to do than if you add an outro or something.

Love your sound! It’s like a brighter sounding Com Truise, I really liked listening to this!

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bbddbdbOP•

This is a good suggestion. I think I just need to write another section for the song, because I think you’re right about it being wrapped up at 1:30, the last 30 seconds are just filler.

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cherryVtank84•

Sounds professionally done.. I really like this! I can imagine this as background music of a tutorial of some sort

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Meamm•

Sounds very well put together. Like someone else said, i think at 1:30 it should be fixed up. I don’t think a complete cut should be done, but at least some sort of break to add new flavor and build up again. It felt very repetitive and old after that

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MomronPk•

This is really cool, add a riser or a tom fill before the drop.

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panjim117•

sound really well, throwback to Hotline miami!
just thought that your drop is a little weak, maybe play with som eq filter, or else?

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bbddbdbOP•

Thanks for listening. I’m going to take a look at making the drop a bit stronger and to create a new section.

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[deleted]•

Shit needs a lot of work. It doesn’t hit at all, and the mixing need a ton of work. I do peep potential though, I’d stay at it. If your doing it for fun it’s cool but if you want a career making music you gotta grind more. I am interested in hearing some more tho.

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