I like the staccato feeling of your poem, and the haunting imagery of geese inviting movement and grief. It brings to mind Mary Oliver's poem "Wild Geese." One can't help but feel a sadness in spite of the upbeat style. Thank you for this contribution.

I love this, but I'm having a hard time describing why. The repetition of words seems very intentional, and I like the singsong quality. It seems like a nursery rhyme I could read to a child.

This [aposiopesistic](http://rhetoric.byu.edu/Figures/A/aposiopesis.htm) [epimone](http://rhetoric.byu.edu/Figures/E/epimone.htm) seems [antanaclasistic](https://rhetoric.byu.edu/Figures/A/antanaclasis.htm).

I'm distracted by this empty box popping up and disappearing to the right simply captioned ^(ADVERTISEMENT), as if scolding to eat the candy not on my plate, or a fish dying in a cooler.

On first read, this is silly. A baby has literally been turned into a goose, like a cherub-thing. It seems clear the speaker is reacting to a breakup. I'm suddenly finding the metaphor "baby" for "lover" to be weird. Why is referring to another adult as an infant affectionate, and why does everyone do this?

The combination of "goose" and "baby" reminds me of the (also strange) stork analogy for childbirth.

"Away today" seems like [anthimeria](http://rhetoric.byu.edu/Figures/A/anthimeria.htm) \- using the preposition "away" as a verb: 'awaying today'. So does "flew today", as if today is a kite.

i feel like this poem is hiding a dark secret

the mother is having a manic episode about her estranged son

kinda feels similar to the YAYVIDEOGAMES incident

so yeah "fun to read along" my ass.

my baby turned into a goose today

and she flew away away

my baby turned into a goose

a goose and flew today 

my baby

a goose

today away

away today

away.

a goose today 

my goose a baby today away

my goose a baby away away

today away 

my baby

a goose

today

a baby

today.


{This one is fun to read aloud}

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My Baby Turned Into a Goose Today