[1777] Light Pollution

First time submitting a story on this sub. Trying to get back into writing. Do your worst!

Concerns: -How is the narrative voice? -A lot of the plot is implied, and the story is mostly a vehicle for ideas, but does it still satisfy? -Does it feel finished or part of a larger work? -Did it command your attention? -Do you want to know more? -Is the prose smooth? Does any of it "pull you out" of the immersion?

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