Incoherent or good? I can't tell. Feel free to correct any grammatical errors.

I like the metaphor of comparing wealth or a "fortune" to the speaker's love. I especially like the lines, I melted my dearest fortune/To forge jewels for you.

I would suggest taking out:

I am a mountain, but frail as a feather

Here and always will be to be with you

No matter the weather.

This middle section doesn't relate to the metaphor or tone in the beginning and end of the poem. Also, I think the lines are somewhat cliché and the poem would be stronger without them.

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