[1171] An Old Man and the Waltz

Found something I wrote several months ago and I'd be interested to get some fresh thoughts.

A few questions (prefer if you read these after, please):

• !Is it well enough implied that the girl is pregnant?!<

• !Did I do a poor job of implying that the girl had a miscarriage at the end of the story?!<

• !Does the narrator's sometimes over-the-top talk contribute to his feelings of inadequacy or does it just feel incongruous with how he's described? !<

Thanks to anyone who reads this.

Critique.

Story.