Snow (Haiku)
Posted Feb 10, 2021, 4:55 AM UTC
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Nice job! It’s interesting how this could work as a normal sentence but the way you presented it makes it poetry, similar to the subject of your poem, something as commonplace as weather evoking something significant. A beautiful combination of simplicity and depth. Love it!
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I live in the mountains and being present in a snow storm is always a spiritual experience. Love this.
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Like someone else has mentioned, I really appreciate that this works as a sentence as well as a poem.
Keeps with your theme of seeing beauty in the ordinary :D
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this is great! a nice short poem talking about something so simple but beautiful. Great work!
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I absolutely love this. It's so simple, but so meaningful at the same time. The reader's mind is left to interpret what the snow stirs within, along to decipher whether it is something good or bad. Personally, I felt a more eerie feeling, but someone else might not feel the same. Great work!
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Haikus can be really hard to nail, and you really nailed it. Your piece evokes this quiet, moving emotion in me that it's actually quite difficult to describe. It's pacifying, much like a gentle snowfall. Thank you for sharing this, I don't have anything to really add here other than I hope to see your work again.
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so cool it has endless possibilities, i love haikus
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I love me a good haiku. No criticism this is great. It drives home an interesting thought that I also feel about nature. What is art? That which inspires beauty? Nature is art but not meant to be. Great job 👏
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I love this! Such a relatable piece of literature! It struck an odd emotion in me, but one I loved! Beautiful work!