[1079] Untitled Mystery Thriller

Hey there, r/DestructiveReaders,

This is my first submission here and my first real attempt at serious fiction writing as an adult. Showing my writing to someone else makes me feel stark naked, so this will be an interesting experience. I know the drill - I fully expect to be absolutely destroyed so give me your worst, fellas. Rip this to shreds and make me a better writer.

Specific feedback I'm looking for:

1. How hooked/interested are you to read more after reading this? Why or why not? If not, what would have hooked you in more?
2. How effective was the characterization, if any, of the MC so far? Am I showing enough of his actions and emotions or am I telling too much?
3. How well can you picture the setting? Is there too much detail? Too little?
4. Prose - just give me a full rundown of the prose.

My submission Untitled Mystery Thriller

Critique

[1697] The Paring Knife

EDIT: This is intended to be a small part of a much larger work, not a standalone piece.