uraiib•

This is really good, it almost kind of sounds like a nursery rhyme to me because of the flow and some rhyming in it. I also love how the length of the poem gradually gets bigger and bigger towards the end, kind of like a scale indicating just how indecisive the person is becoming.

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control4smilerssOP•

Thank you the scaling was almost subconscious but your absolutely right..

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Infenaskull•

Very nice, I like the uncertainty this gives me as the speaker stumbles around which I assume is a symbolic representation for how all of us tend to stumble through life. Great effort overall!

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control4smilerssOP•

Kinda like stumbling around which answer is right.. Thank you glad you enjoyed!

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