[2107] The Fundamental Divide

Hi everyone.

Here's the first chapter of my adult sci-fi novel. It's set in an alternate world, so I wanted to ease the reader into it quite gradually. A few words and actions won't make immediate sense which is a deliberate choice on my part (not a fan of authors spoonfeeding the reader). What I'm more concerned about is if anything is confusing to the point of being distracting or making it impossible to follow what's happening.

Chapter is here

Critique: [2060] Helen's Dream

Mods: Apologies for the 47-word deficit. My piece grew a bit since I did the critique, but I hope it's close enough to the 1:1 rule to be allowed. If not, let me know and I'll do another critique.