haiku 1
Posted Mar 22, 2021, 10:54 AM UTC
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Haiku 1in the most calm manner ironically talks about the chaos of the mind. The first line introduces the reader to the foundation and the protagonist of the poem that is the mind and also introduces the conflict which is the confusion that torments the mind. More than just confusion, it is the doubting confusion which indicated that the mind is anxious and overthinks. The second line talks about what the mind yearns, which is sleep but more than sleep it is freedom from anxiety. It throws light on how people with anxiety, for that matter anyone with mental illness, feel that they are not normal and wish they could be like the others. This extends to the third line where peace is closed eyes. It would be a shame to not talk about the eternal sleep, as that will give the mind peace forever and maybe the mind is tired of the sleepless nights.
As a haiku would go, the syllables are in the 5-7-5 format. There is a twist even though I don't think it is a twist in story as it is known that a mind in war always yearns for peace. But the twist felt more of a change in tone. The first line feels chaotic and then the next line feels calm. I did like that change. And with the constraint of the syllables, the poem did cover a lot, and I admire that. Write more Haikus, I guess. :)