r/OCPoetry•5 yr. ago

Without Pain

Is this real, this reality of mine?

It feels real, but something's out of line.

Everybody is moving forward, embarking on their lives.

Yet here I have been stuck, just trying to figure out why?

My growth as a person has stagnated, I can't move past this place.

There is something I am missing, some tribulation I must face.

It's pain I am missing, I never let my self hurt.

I fear the pain of loss the most, so I keep all my feelings convert.

I can't come to love the person in the mirror, from this point I can't ascend.

There is nothing I paticularly hate, but to say I am happy would surely be pretend.

I wanted to always believe in free will, but in reality that's not what I see.

Free will can exist but it has a cost, truly nothing in life is free.

You have to be willing to bump heads, and at times lose friends.

Into the unknown you must go, you have to see this to the end.

Till eventually one day, you can look into the mirror and see.

The person staring back at me in the mirror, is finally me.

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Posted Apr 9, 2021, 2:51 AM UTC · edited

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lchickadee•5 yr. ago

I appreciate the amount of honesty and emotion you've let into this poem. It can be quite daunting to share something so personal, at least for me it is. You should experiment with different ways that you could 'show' the raw emotion in your poetry rather than telling it. That being said though, I did find the bluntness of the wording in this poem to be confronting, which is a good thing!

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Metalgear-hero•5 yr. ago

Self actualization is real scary for sure. The idea that nothing gets done until you actively try to do things is both obvious and daunting and I would like to believe everyone goes through that. From what i have been told "Your past makes you, but does not define who you are" lovely poem :)