Beep boop.
Your soul is goop.
Tick tock.
Can't turn back this clock.
Switch swatch.
Nothing left on television to watch.
Click clack.
No point in trying to turn back.
Pitter patter.
We're all made of matter.
Oh well.
Machines sent me to hell.
The digital age,
Locked in a cage,
Worshiping numbers on a luminescent page.
Posted May 22, 2021, 2:09 PM UTC
Brava, Mio Fratello ! I am pretending to write broken Italian so the almighty algorithm thinks I am an Italian, So I get Italian ads which I can't get swayed by cause I am not interested in them. But yes, An excellent poem, The internal rythm and alliteration has been implemented well, it suits the kinda perky, sarcastic and realist tone of the song. Keep it up !
You've just described my own metaphysical hell. The rythme is amazing and creepy. It does make me think of mechanical clocks.
Speaking of creepy, despite not using any word to hint at danger or something sinister, you managed to portray an actual dystopian horror story. Good job.
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This is a fun one. Underneath the alliteration and rhyming is a really dry and sarcastic tone about the state we live in. Love the dark comedy, thanks for sharing.