[2344] Something different: the dungeon

RDR friends:

This should stand alone OK, but is part 3 of a webnovel. Also the Juhn part is rewritten from a prior submission, and greatly improved thanks to you all! (At least I think its improved.)

Background: Hadrian is the main character who we are cheering for, but he has been poisoned, and its unclear how bad he is doing.

My questions would be:

1. How does Juhn come across?
2. How was the tension in part two, the Liago part?
3. How did Agan's laughing land? How did his relationship to the MC feel?

Links are:

Reading link

line edits if ya wanna

I'd have credit from prior posts but not doing critiques is for chumps so, here's two: 2765 1200

Thanks as always,

That one big dumb horse