[3100] The second chapter of an epic fantasy.

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EDIT: Thanks so much for the critique everyone! I really appreciate the help. I think that I have gathered enough information that I now know what to do going forward. I'm going to stop responding now as I think reading any more critiques will only confuse my intentions going forward with the next draft. Thanks again!

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Hello everyone,

My work

The critiques:

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Some context: This is the (second draft) second chapter of a much larger fantasy work and the introductory chapter for my character Lucas. Being that it is a second chapter their isn't a whole lot going on plot-wise. My hope for this chapter is that it's just interesting or intriguing enough in its small dramas to keep the reader engaged.

My hope for my prose is that comes off as more so sincere and engaging than highbrow or overbearing.

My main curiosities:>Did you like it?

>Would you be interested in more?

>Are the characters distinct? enjoyable? or relatable?

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>What are your thoughts on my prose?

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Thank you for reading!