[723] Eater of Worlds

Hello all! This is my first submission so I'm interested to see what kind of feedback you all can offer.

Here is the doc. It's the prologue to an epic science fantasy I'm writing, and in typical prologue fashion sets up the stakes (in this case a sort of eternal recurrence) as well as the general tone of the work.

I'm interested in literally any thoughts you have to offer, but here are a few key things I'm looking for feedback on:

• Quality of the writing

• Does this draw you in? Do you want to know what happens in the world I've set up?

• Can you easily visualize this? The prologue is intended to seem somewhat vague and dreamlike, which is a tough thing to write because I don't want it so abstract that the reader just thinks "okay these are some nice words, but what exactly is happening?"

• Personal takeaways from this bit. This is just a consequence of vague/dreamlike writing, but one thing I'm always interested in is where a reader thinks things might be going.

I've previously critiqued [1335] Ouroboros here.

If I'm missing anything needed prior to contribution, it's a mistake on my part. Please let me know and I will correct it!