Necromancer (Edited Resubmission)
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Posted Jul 17, 2021, 7:23 AM UTC
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Posted Jul 17, 2021, 7:23 AM UTC
Darkly macabre with the hint of warning, and just playful enough to catch my attention. Great poem, I'd try to change the formatting a bit so it doesn't cling to each other but otherwise fantastic.
I agree. It has an almost modern Edgar Allen Poe meter to it, and isn't mere angsty nonsense. Verges on borderline funny without detracting from the dark feel of it. The off-kilter rhyme scene enhances the overall effect.
OP, hit enter twice before each line, I think. It would scan so much better if it wasn't in block format.
Thank you for your comments and your suggestion for formatting. I was struggling with that aspect of posting this poem.
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