[2215] Memories Lost - Prologue, V2 (Fantasy)

For those who read my earlier post, major changes were done.

The prologue went from 6.2k to 2.2k word. I think thats more digestible.

If it isn't working at all now, then it will have to be chucked entirely.

I am not saying that I write in the style of Game of Thrones or Tolkien, or Sanderson, or Aleron Kong. However, if you don't like either of them then you are likely not my audience. I am trying to appeal to fantasy lovers, especially medieval style where some things take a while to explain and a little bit of mystery is tolerated.

Questions:

- Would you be interested in reading on?

- What do you think is happening in 1 or 2 sentences?

- anything that you found confusing, unclear, jarring, etc.

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Here is the link:

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Critique:

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