thankyou for reading and taking the time to comment. and everything you said is very true. and I'm glad you understood the point of the poem, that makes me really happy!

This is great. For starters, I've never heard the word "finity" but it perfectly captures the seriousness of limited resources (and renewable resources being wasted faster than they can be replaced).

When working with billions or trillions of anything (dollars, trees, animals, people) 1% is still possibly 10s of billions, which is 100s of billions or many trillions given time.

Greed is an addiction, and by definition it never knows when enough is enough, or more likely, too much

Thank you for sharing

There’s such beautiful wording here to otherwise terribly ugly real life imagery. It makes me sad. 

I reflect on a ginormous tree I found a few years ago off a beaten path. I go to her often to meditate and have had such profound experiences there. She’s the largest of any in the area. Such a thing of beauty. And I know it’s only a matter of time before she sees her fate at the hands of the greedy.

This poem just oozes hopelessness. But sadly, hopelessness seems to be the most probable reality 😔


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>This is far from the birth of agriculture  
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>These men live by a greedy culture  
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>They steal and take  
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>All earth can make  
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>For no benefit but theirs

Beautiful, haunting, and true. The above lines are my favorite section.

I really like the metaphor of the 1%: It seems that the poem is saying the 1% of humanity is taking more than their fair share of 1%, and how much damage that will cause.

I can't come up with much more critic, it's a good message.

In the place

Where there was once pine, oak and ash

Praying to no god

Chainsaws and painful sorrows

The trees weep

Smog and logging 

One percent can make a massive dent

If they're not ever so careful  

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We take the brunt of their hunt

No amount can satisfy them

A weary tail our past will tell

Of industry and plunder  

  

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This is far from the birth of agriculture

These men live by a greedy culture

They steal and take

All earth can make

For no benefit but theirs    

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We choke and gasp

While they grasp all natural finity

Stolen from the future

No one shall have air

And so in short we all despair

As there is no end,

Do we have the power to cease their hunger?

The will of the one percent

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it only takes one out of one hundred.