[1490] Partial Chapter 1 - Silence in the Sands
Thanks for the feedback!
[EDIT] As I made some edits (hope that's okay!), the word count is now at 1580 (my critique was for a piece of 1580 words, surplus = 0). I'd definitely still appreciate as much feedback as possible! :)
Hello friends!
This is the first half of Chapter 1 of this YA Science Fantasy story that I've been working on.
The feedback I got on my earlier draft was incredibly helpful, thank you so much! I look forward to hearing from you all again. I'm not sure if this is much better than before but I think that I've become more conscientious of my writing style so fingers crossed!
Given that I'm a very new writer, any advice is appreciated! But one of my biggest worries with this part of the chapter is that it's all action and no substance? So it'd be helpful to know if it completely bores you to tears (which lowkey it might).
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Posted Jul 28, 2021, 2:12 AM UTC · edited