Seven Busy Days in Babar's Flourishing Democracy

This is President Babar and his wife, Celeste.

Here are Cousin Arthur and the children--Pom, Flora, Isabelle, and little Franz Ferdinand. Babar's family is busy serving their independent nation state all week.

On Monday Isabelle and Arther enjoy equestrian lessons with Jessica Springsteen.

On Tuesday all the children visit soldiers in the new shiny barracks.

On Wednesday Babar takes his whole family out to greet the foreign envoy. They thank said envoy for the shiny new barracks.

On Thursday Babar gets bad news that he doesn't share with the children.

On Friday Flora helps Isabelle in the garden.

On Saturday the only secure place in Babar's independent nation state is an airport full of foriegn soldiers.

On Sunday President Babar is dead, and his wife, Celeste, is planning another busy week of service for the children. This time in exile.

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Posted Aug 17, 2021, 12:34 PM UTC

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Siamese_Dreaming•

interesting read and quite harrowing. you have written a poem about a serious current affair in the style of the well-known Babar children's books. you took a risk in doing so, as it would be quite easy for a piece of this nature to come across as tasteless. but I think the use of satire definitely works here. it reminded me of how children's stories are usually kept light-hearted and innocent (because it's a widely accepted phenomenon that children should be sheltered from suffering as much as possible). however, children in certain nations are disproportionately exposed to war, pain, and abuse of human rights. therefore, their "childhood innocence" is often compromised in terrible ways.

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I’m super new, so don’t take this completely to heart. One thing I wonder is, why are there so many characters in this short piece. And while I do understand that it doesn’t matter too much, since this isn’t a book, I just wonder if it would sound better if you filed down the list of characters, maybe using some names multiple times. The characters don’t really mean anything to the readers, and therefore I don’t think there need to be so many. Thank you for reading.

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asearchforyouOP•

Thank you, Levi Ethan. Have you ever read a Babar book?

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I have not. It would make better sense now that I know this was about something, but most of my points still stand for other people who have never read them, either.

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