Thank you for pointing that out, I will fix that promptly.

I just changed the settings on the doc. Lemme know if that didn't fix it and I'll try redoing the link.

See my posted edit for option a)

Option b) another critique. Even a short one. We absolutely refuse to compromise on the word count inflation line.

What do you mean? I will try again if need be.

You trying to juke me and dunk? What is this? Where's my hundred words? You missed the dunk!

Edit: I've decided if you use this as a writing workshop, it'll be even easier. You can edit out and post a revised work shopped word count that is 150 words less, and you'll get approved. Ez clap boys.

**Structure:**

You have a lot of structural issues. Just going to list a few corrected spots that jumped out:

* environment; obelisks
* this world. The
* afraid." The music
* he sat amongst the grass
* its offspring

**Characters/Setting:**

* I had a very hard time building up a mental image of Bishop in this story. Give him a soul and a personality. Even if he's the strong and stoic type, those people have flaws of their own that you could explore, namely the instinct to bury any and all emotions.

* The voices don't have much personality either. It's not required because I would definitely get it if your answer is "this is them speaking as a unit, so there's no personality" but they're roughly 100% exposition as is.

* I liked the description of the meadow. Keep being very descriptive of your environment, I think that was my favorite part of the story I read from you before.

**Plot/Tone/Dialogue:**

* I listed some structural issues above, but you especially have issues with the 

[863] Bishop