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This was such a fun read, I’m not sure how I feel about this “mock god” bc you say he’s “a faux” but also his “spirit old” which feels very god like to me. So it’s contradictory in a way that made me want to keep reading. I love the first line as well it’s a real hook.

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I like this poem a lot. The word "web" seems a little off, like it doesn't fit the rest of the poem almost? I'm not too sure; I'm trying to get better at commenting on here lol. I really like the "artificial, no sugar". I don't know why, but that line is powerful.

Nice poem about antichrist, hopefully that guy gets his life figured out.