yeah, and i got a coivd test, it not covid, and i dont even have a fever, so it's just anoying


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Love the rawness and simplicity of this. I particularly feel as if free verse served this poem well. No need for any particular rhyme or rhythm. I honestly find the content and delivery to be brilliant. Only a couple of takes:

I would play around with your punctuation. I don't love the inconsistency of it and I find it sort of distractingMaybe go without it?  With exception to the end to really emphasize the last two statements "I'm fine.  
Dont worry about me."

You seem to do well already to add pauses by breaking up your lines, why beat a dead horse with punctuation yknow?

Also I would change: 

My voice,  
Barely a rasp,  
More like a breath,  
Insubstantial, against everyday noises

To:

My voice,  
Barely a rasp,  
More like a breath,  
Insubstantial 

against everyday noises

&#x200B;

Insubstantial can stand on its own and it looks cleaner imo.

Drinking nyquil like shots of vodka

To drown my drowning lungs,

As the pain turns,

At 2:18 this morning

&amp;#x200B;

My voice,

Barely a rasp,

More like a breath,

Insubstantial,

&amp;#x200B;

 against everyday noises

&amp;#x200B;

Half a tissue

Covered in snot.

The other half covered in orange phlegm i keep coughing up

Im fine

&amp;#x200B;

I'm fine

Dont worry about me.

&amp;#x200B;

[https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/q6eh80/black\_eyes\_and\_broken\_hearts/hgbvhp3/?context=3](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/q6eh80/black_eyes_and_broken_hearts/hgbvhp3/?context=3)

&amp;#x200B;

[https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/q6gij5/a\_blank\_verse\_for\_kurt/hgbv4w4/?context=3](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/q6gij5/a_blank_verse_for_kurt/hgbv4w4/?context=3)