[2530] TEARS AND CLAWS - Chapter 1

I've been posting, like, every chapter except for the first one.

So, why not?

MY STORY: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ASpwDD4c9CLltWd5op7-VtAQ2U6ex-W8ecjd1sWyfB4/edit?usp=sharing

CRITIQUE: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/q50p5k/2530_rosie_short_storylit_fiction/

QUESTIONS: Does this chapter overwhelm you as a reader? Lots of stuff went down on in it, and there’s no real break on it. Do you feel baffled (in a bad way) at any part of the story? 

Also, what did you think of Val as a character? And Elliot as the main antagonist?