[2125] It's Like Uber, But For Eternal Damnation (part 2)

Hello,

This is part 2 of a short story I have written. Part 1 can be found here. Alternatively, a brief synopsis:

Nita is the newly promoted CEO of LaVey and Company, the world's premier demonic consulting firm for centuries. They sell demonic contracts to all who are willing to pay the price. Recently a new startup, Satisfyy, has popped up looking to disrupt the demonic contracting industry with their shiny new app and hip young attitude. Nita has just shut down a promotional charity event that Satisfyy was planning and is currently trying to counter the bad press by running an event of her own.

All feedback is welcome, although I'd prefer structural feedback rather than line edits if possible.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/194BeLKKDU_O1Q7HTjQUNe87RN-LHy9LvsUtATt9xpcQ/edit

Critiques: [2842] with ~700 words left over

Thanks!