The Happy Poet

The themes portrayed reminded me a lot of "Bluebird" by Charles Bukowski. It could be interpreted in many ways, naturally, but to me both poems seem like different takes on very similar, if not the same, situation: self-inflicted (to some extent) suffering, for the sake of art. While the take on this poem seems to focus more on the influence of what other people want to hear/read and the direct impact of that on the poet, which is submission to (emotional) pain. Whereas in Bukowski's work, the focus is on the poet and on his wistful awareness that he can't let the bluebird out, he can't allow himself to be happy for the sake of his art, although he sees himself as capable of making that change. I personally think the poem could benefit from rhymes! As it's not particularly too long as a whole and the verses are rather short, I thought a more rhythmic structuring of the words could make the message conveyed a little more impactful. That aside, I really liked this one! Keep writing :)

*Edit: typo :p

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I really love this poem, but may I suggest some edits to help it flow better?

The Happy Poet

Wakes up every day

Smiling, laughing, and living

Then He’ll He'll then write a song of pain

Because Joy isn’t entertaining

I have a few more suggestions if you're interested. Overall though, I love this so much.