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Hell0turtle

alternate dimension

I wanna be next to you, breathing your air, sharing body parts, mending this hole.

You rip me open on purpose, get inside my mind. Pull emotions out of me I’ve long had buried for good reason.

I don’t settle down, I get riled up. You hurt me, but it’s irrelevant because you could never love me.

An alternate reality version of us exists, in which we met before we broke. The traumas we’ve suffered would evaporate into the unknown.

We’d be each other’s other half. Instead, I’m now severed in half; head versus heart. Wondering if you’d ever explain, apologize, or tell me you want me.

You’re afraid of love, a gift which I offer freely. I challenge your perception of yourself, the mask you wear has cracked.
You’ll heal, I pray—I forgive you and hope for the best for you.

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Posted Jan 1, 2022, 11:07 AM UTC

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TheUnco•

Hey, I find it is some what similar to the song stitched by Shawn Mendez and i love it for the way. Plus the raw essence of it makes it even better. Kudos!

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Hell0turtleOP•

Thank you I love that song!

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3JayyG0nzo3•

The ebb n flow of this piece is amazing. I love the push and pull of it. Excellent structure & tone!

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Hell0turtleOP•

Thanks so much! I’m all about the ebb and flow.

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ryurkovich9•

You make me feel like I did in high school with a broken heart, nice work. I like the structure of sort of paragraphs.

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Hell0turtleOP•

That’s good to hear! I guess it does have a youthful love vibe. I’ve been trying to be less pretentious in my diction.

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Emiliaggg_eatsfood•

I had someone in my life like this, it took him a decade to apologize. xo

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Hell0turtleOP•

I really really needed to hear that at this exact moment I opened my phone! I was literally just telling myself that I have to respect my decision to cut the contact. I wouldn’t be happy if it were my friend and their person either. Thanks!

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Emiliaggg_eatsfood•

Omg I'm so glad xoxo

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