Good flow! Very specific with the situations and the mindset of the speaker with “I miss the way you’d ignore me but never tell me why”  Personally what I get from this is a state of recollection and not necessarily a yearn. The reason I say this is because when the speaker says “I miss the way I’d think about you all the damn time” it gives me vibes as if the subject no longer dwells in the speaker’s mind as it used to be but the scent is still strong. Good stuff homie

Ahhhhhh this is so good! At first I could really envision the sorrow expressed in this piece where even though something did happen, they still reminisce about the times shared. Because in the end, it was them, them who made them this way. They who made your heart flutter, only to leave you nothing more but a goodbye. So simple, yet touching. Love it.

the rhyme scheme is nice- perhaps work on making it more subtle? you have great ideas- show them ♡

Very nice to read, all the way through. I think you have a very nice style. I will say though you can afford some more complexity in your word choice and phrasing. There's nothing wrong with simplicity and forthrightness in your telling of things. Actually it's quite nice but a couple phrases that add some profundity to the piece could do wonders. I like it keep writing please!

I could see this as a song, it is truly lovely.

There's a real honesty in the simplicity/of this that the contractions you use help to emphasize. I think, maybe, you could reexamine the line breaks to stress elements of the meter more and raise the poignancy more. Especially in the final stanza i.e. the last two lines could be 4 lines?. That's just me though. I like it, it's naive in a good way.

I love this poem. It shows that when we lose someone we don't miss just the good things but the "bad" things too. It's really powerful and I just love how it's written.
It's filled with sorrow and grief and just brings out emotion.
I think that almost anyone cam relate to this and that makes it only better.

I can sense the insecurity the speaker experienced throughout the relationship and identify with it to a certain extent; that one is not enough for their partner. I personally have experienced it due to the way I was raised, having an "inferiority/defectiveness" complex of sorts. Really rings through in the lines:  


>I miss the way you’d wait  
A couple hours to respond.  
I miss the way I’d bite my nails  
Whenever you were gone.  
I miss the way you’d ignore me  
But never tell me why.  
I miss the way I’d fear something I did  
Would mean goodbye.

From a poetic standpoint. This is written in a fairly modern style, simplistic language to describe a complex array of emotions, which I really enjoy when done well (like here). 

Since you decided to rhyme and near-rhyme, i would maybe work on tightening up the meter a bit so it flows smoothly throughout. I recommend taking a look at [this](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/meocp4/a_beginners_guide_to_meter/) for some guidance


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I miss the way you made me feel  
Like I was soaring high.  
I miss the way I’d think about you  
All of the damn time.  
I miss the way our conversations  
Took all day and night.  
I miss the way we’d laugh,  
I even miss the way we’d fight.

I miss the way you’d wait  
A couple hours to respond.  
I miss the way I’d bite my nails  
Whenever you were gone.  
I miss the way you’d ignore me  
But never tell me why.  
I miss the way I’d fear something I did  
Would mean goodbye.

I miss your voice the day when you  
Told me that we were through.  
I miss the highs, I miss the lows  
‘Cause all of them were you.

&amp;#x200B;

Link 1: [https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/s1sbaj/i\_am\_fucking\_emotional/](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/s1sbaj/i_am_fucking_emotional/)

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I Miss the Way