[2278] Bob and the Barbershop (Working Title)

Hey all,

I've been offering feedback on the page for some time, and am finally posting a story. This is about a unique form of currency in and a working arrangement with an alien race. I do like this one, but am curious what others think and do have some specific feedback I could use:

Does the world make sense? I've had this concept in my head for some time, but do not know if I'm explaining it well enough. Plus, I don't want this story to just be exposition describing the world and nothing more.

Does this feel like a self-contained story, or the beginning of a larger one? I don't have much beyond the events in the story, but wonder if the world is worth building on.

Pacing. Does the story end abruptly? Does there need to be a third customer?

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vHCBrGBzUloO9RYVS4Fn8yhl8B4K9F5a/edit?usp=sharing&ouid=100644143621232923208&rtpof=true&sd=true

Crits:

[1148] https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/rjnhsk/1148_the_only_rain_on_europa_is_red_v34/

[1402] https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/s3rqc8/1402_mermaids/