The Internal Struggle

What an enigmatic piece. I feel as if poetry is subjective rather than objective and each person takes what they will from any given poem. This piece resonates with me on multiple levels but the verbiage is the most striking part for me. I find myself pondering each line searching for individual meaning which is inevitably there. Our inside voices tell us just as many truths as they do lies. Well done.

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This is my favorite poem I've read on this sub, which is saying a lot considering how many great writers there are! It is beautiful and very emotional- the kind of poetry I think most people can appreciate and connect with. Also has an interesting rhyme scheme which I think is very hard to execute well, so good job there too!

This is a great piece! I honestly don’t know a ton about poetry, so I don’t feel like I can offer you valuable advice on structure/or any really meaningful critique. BUT I can say with 100% certainty that I really enjoyed this, and I felt like you did a great job articulating how loud the mind can be - I like the way you focused on that to convey the power of mental illness. Keep it up!

Wow, this is an incredibly elegant illustration of the busyness of consciousness. The feeling of lostness of turning to places one shouldn't and not hearing the voices one should; this conjures the concept of "grasping" for me- reaching outwards into the world to resolve one's suffering. I especially love the final line of that leaves us with an uncertain nothingness . Perhaps a blissful end to grasping?

Very very cool.

The way that this is written, the vocabulary. It drew me in and I loved it. I hope to be able to write this well someday.

This is relatable on so many levels, and your articulation is really poignant. Great work

Continuously reaping and roaring! I'm new to the poetry world, but this shook me. Well versed, reading aloud helped me dive into the depth of your lines 👏

It feels like all the parts that are within every human and the power struggle they have with each other.

This is one of the most relatable pieces I have ever read. Everything from the imagery to the rhyme scheme is incredibly well done! Anyone who has felt helpless and/or depressed can definitely see themselves in this selection. In addition to the relatability this poem does a magnificent job of being blunt yet smooth in it’s delivery. Although the rhyme scheme isn’t flashy it works incredibly well and enhances the introspective vibe.