[301] Misfortune Come in Threes

Parents dead, lost job, and girlfriend guess what?

A story for a 300-word competition. No set theme, so I just sketched it on my way to work. I don't expect much, but if you can point out how to make it better, then go for it. I'm particularly unsure about the ending, I miss some juice in it, but can't point out what.

Any and all critiques are welcomed. No need to sugarcoat for me (as if I would need to say it...).

Story:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/138ALPtSRo4knRTjzWDILFxn2dlaOJTTn75MdnrNSfr8/edit?usp=sharing

For mods:

This is a repost because the original post was marked as leeching - my fault because I misunderstood the guidelines. I've corrected my actions.

First critique:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/sguzeh/226_final_horror_microfic/

And here's another one:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/sha437/499_the_last_light/hv9kndx/

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BTW, I'm not sure about the genre "bizarro". If you have better suggestions, please share.

Cheeeeeers