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Hi all.

I wrote this a while back as an attempt to portray a grandiloquent and pretentious narrator. It's a "prologue" of sorts, I suppose.

I'm not yet comfortable with having a character "speak from the heart" like this person does. Rather than stare into an emotional void, the narrator instead dresses up their emotions (and includes "positive" emotions!). I'm not sure if I've done so in a way that's a little too much, as I don't have a good sense for this sort of thing in the real world, either. Let me know if I'm way off the mark.

I suppose the whole prologue is a hook—a huge promise, if you will. Did it work?

Thanks for reading and/or critiquing!

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