[3554] Blackrange - Ch. 5 Excerpt
Chapters 2-4 undergoing major construction. This is the next "safe" chapter.
Barebones summary of events thus far:
This opens in a world in which every person is born with a Talent, a magical ability unique to them. Alex's Talent is Fluency: she can speak and understand any language and only knows a foreign language is being spoken by the taste of strawberry on her tongue.
Alex meets Matt in a bar, they fall in love, get married. Then Matt is mysteriously murdered, and his death sends Alex into a year-long depression/drugs/alcohol spiral. Then Alex's friend Vero calls her up to use her Talent to read from an ancient book, the doing of which transports her to the middle of a desert in another world. She wanders through the desert, dehydrated and suffering from alcohol withdrawal, and eventually passes out. Enter Chapter 5.
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Logic issues? Believability issues? Immersion? It's super important that this becomes the best it can be since it's the real introduction to the new world. Otherwise, as always, any and all feedback welcome.
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Posted Feb 17, 2022, 6:14 AM UTC · edited