[1484] Mr. Jones Down On the Ground - Opening Scene

Hihi,

This is the first part of a novel about murder and ghosts and family. I'm looking for general thoughts as well as your classic ABCs.

1. What was awesome?

2. What was boring?

3. What was confusing?

4. Would you read more?

Always happy to submit new shizz to you fine folks <3

[Mr. Jones Down on the Ground] [3293] Critique