Thank you for your feedback! There are a lot of gaps for this piece I need to fill in terms of flow/theme which I did not consider fully when writing this. Really interesting to see what you think of when you read metallic, wondering if you are generally a sci-fi reader and now considering who my reader base would be for this…Anyways I really appreciate you giving me so much to think about. With all this good feedback def feeling the pressure to improve lol…Cheers!

Hey there

I liked the piece overall and thought the threading of past experiences / flashbacks through a boxing bout worked well. The visuals from the boxing were excellent, my mind painted a picture throughout which made the story easy to follow. The flashbacks were confusing and seemed scattered. You went from PTSD to motorbike riding to a grandparents funeral in a very short space of time, not dwelling on the significance of any single one and without any kind of thread tying them together. 

I liked the ending but didn’t understand it, I’m guessing his line about the rojo was related to the flashbacks in some way? Like it's a cool quote, if it was tied into a general narrative thread with the flashbacks could've been totally badass. Also the last quote seems like it should segue into another chapter or at least paragraph. Who’s saying their nickname is tulip boy, the protagonist or who he’s fighting? Again, is this related to the flashbacks in some way, it's unclear. I think it wo

Hey all,
looking for any and all feedback--from did you like it, would you read more like it to grammar nuances. Readability is definitely something I am concerned about. Thanks in advance.

Tulip Boy
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aTzUIftBdtqMztCm073NLDHXdrKyy63mvcfrHFCshs8/edit?usp=sharing

My comment (story worth a read too!) [688]
https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/sy5s94/688_what_did_the_molasses_flood_see/

[506] Tulip Boy