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Waltzing to Lady Bug Jazz Tunes, Twenties Alive Again!!

Poem

Nobody swung like

That old duck

That sat down sucking on

Trombone & trumpet/cornet

mouthpieces by gazebos pregnant

With pregnant cats and cat burglars &

Coffee-stained-cross-dressing-fedora-

Wearing virgos masquerading as

Fuzzy breasted Virgins,

Ready for nipping Love in dry rotten

Hammocks.

Listen to the roses ramble,

They sing like Miles.

Don’t stop now, old broads like you quit

Too

Soon,

They smell the mildew & morning frost

Grow like spiny fungus on a canvas

Window, & run away.

July never felt further than it did then,

Your body high and trembling like a

Cliche in my walking stick arms.

Tie me up and make me flail like

Coltranes fingers,

Roll with calluses and umber

identificational spirals (uzumaki man!)

I’m a lady bug, waiting for a boy

With two more dots than I,

Complete me,

Red,

Bareback boy O’ my dreams, fire like boy,

Foam & swim,

Callous my nose,

My sternum,

My navel,

Encrust peppermint lips,

Take me now into railroad woods,

Burden me with unbridled praise,

I am a maple leaf,

Tremble before my chameleon decay.

Why stop now?

I’ll go on swimmingly my

Dear Bosnian beauty,

You with poor taste in music,

Worse in genes,

“Har har”

I’m a REAL womanizer,

Bukowski grow red!

Embarrassed!

I’ve won!

Ha!

Coltrane is chastising me now,

Goddamn

Saxophone.

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Posted Mar 1, 2022, 2:23 AM UTC

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Morringard•

I’m not sure how to feel about this? It is GOOD, don’t get me wrong; the flow of the poem is particularly entrancing. Depending on how the reader reads it, there is a very compelling rhythm and drive to this poem. Good Stuff :P

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