Submission 1

Great poem, and I can relate to the frustration of not accomplishing anything, even more so when you are reminded of your past failure. I'm guessing that you hate that everything feels the same, and like a loop. I hope one day you can accomplish things you never dreamed of.

One note, I love this:

"I never

Even

Left

The bed.

I am wrapped

Firmly

In the familiarity

Of failure."

I interpreted it as that being the detail that bothers you the most, because you give the most emphasis on the words as only one or two words are being used a line.

Great poem!

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ugh that last sentence hits so good the alliteration is chef's kiss

i love a good short poem, each little sentence saya so much. I really enjoyed this.

this is low effort feedback, I'm not using to validate my own post ;P

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I enjoy your style

I don't have much to add but the use of enjambment was perfect... the singular words have so much weight to them, which really adds to the feelings of listlessness. And the poem's at the perfect pace, no unnecessary fluff. So yeah, it's good.

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This was really good!

Perfectly encapsulates and describes the feeling and frustration of not doing anything and wasting your day.

I also related to this on a personal level because this is how I spend all my Sundays 😅