First poem in years

My favorite part is definitely

This love a thousand words might say But this love shall die with me one day

You keep really good rhythm throughout the poem. Rhymes are hard to maintain, and I notice you use the same one twice: "Loose these thoughts and set me free". It's a great line for emphasis and that seems to be the theme of the poem, but feel free to explore more rhymes as well for variety. Congrats on the first poem in a while!

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This hit hard on me. While reading this I imagined a small white wooden house, surrounded by a field of yellow flowers, with me and my family that I don’t even have yet. The power this poem has, to talk about love and invoke such an image in my head is something really fascinating, thanks for writing this.

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