a soft prison
is where you escape.
silk caressing
every inch of you—
this bed
is so sweet
you bind yourself to it.
you’d rather melt
every little hour
until the night turns blue
than watch
a morning bird
drowning on song.
April 7, 2022, 7:59 PM - 8, 2:03 AM
Please don't feel the need to be complimentary. Your honest thoughts would make me happiest 😁
Posted Apr 9, 2022, 2:04 AM UTC
I keep coming back to this poem. I feel like that's a good thing! This poem speaks to my sense of touch, but I'm still grasping for meaning if I'm honest. But that may just be me. The poem is soft and quiet, and with the last line I can really see the image of the bird and hear the singing. But it's not a pleasant bird song. It's obnoxious. Just a few thoughts. Keep writing and thanks for sharing.
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I think this poem is quite lovely, even if it feels kind of gloomy at the same time? It's difficult to explain how it makes me feel, but I liked it a lot c: